Bloodspilt Showdown Nice for a frirst try.
Nice job for a first try.
I see you used a crappy FL break beat i suggest you should make your own.
Also the track is kinda messy in a few places you should EQ the sounds a bit more.
But the melody that comes in is very nice.
I can tell thay you put most the effort in the melody wich is good. but you shold but more to the drums.
My tip to you is to make more efforts on the beats and drums give them some more punch.
Try to use some external plugins for the beat. (I suggest battery 3) so you can add the sounds you like and make the beat in the piano roll.
But keep it up i hope to hear more drum n bass from you